Tuesday, June 28, 2005

I think I want to change that poem slightly. The title was too explanatory, and I removed a verse.



    Utah Valley Revisited

    The rocky peak of Timpanogos rules
    the valley (where each year more houses spread
    in stuccoed testament to fruitful people).

    Directions here are given not as right
    & left, but east, west, north or south, because
    Timp's rocky peak is there to anchor the way.

    Generations ago my family came
    put shoulder to the wheel & carved a home
    both for now & for eternity to come.

    Their gardens (grown from dust) were fed by faith;
    their straight streets (sprung from a practical bent)
    ran like a checkerboard north-south, east-west.

    & all in all, they made a world in their
    image. The flaming swords of seraphim
    punished the idle, while work was rewarded.

    But I turned my back on the mountain peak,
    the harsh desert & works that raised fields there.
    I left the enormity of my youth
    & found a world where dew can drop with thunder.

3 Comments:

At 5:27 PM, Blogger Moi said...

Always gotta be cryptic huh? :)

 
At 5:34 PM, Blogger Lee said...

I'm not sure what's crytic here, or whether you're being sarcastic. I'm not sure of too much. I am becoming more sure that this poem works for me, but lacks broader appeal. Maybe if fails through a lack of general knowledge of Utah Valley, early Utah history and Mormon Hymns. Oh well.

 
At 8:15 PM, Blogger Moi said...

I was just commenting on your need to change the title just because it was too explanitory.

 

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